Monday, November 14, 2011

The Outsiders

The Outsiders
It was a cold night as Johnny and Pony boy were walking to the park it was about two in the morning, why were they taking this walk you ask well it all started when Pony boy came home late at night he got yelled at by his big brother there was back and forth between them and then his older brother slapped him and Pony boy ran away. Here we are now they have just arrived at the park that’s when they see the blue mustang pull up packed with 5 socs that were angry and drunk Johnny quickly pulled out his switch blade and was ready to fight but the socs had surrounded them they took Pony boy and shoved his bead into the fountain and they were about to pull a blade on Johnny he was being held back by two socs. But then the soc with the blade went down it was Darry and Soda they had come to look for Pony boy and Johnny soda charged the soc that was trying to drown Pony boy and threw him off of Pony and threw a punch at his face instantly giving him a bloody nose now it was a fair fight a soc threw a punch at Darry hitting him in the stomach Johnny tackled him to the ground while Darry gained his breath back Soda was taking blows from a soc he fell to the ground and pony leaped up and upper cutted the soc that was punching Johnny suddenly a huge rush of sirens and flashing lights had appeared all around the park ten officers poured out of cars immediately surrounding the boys and arrested them all.

Authors note: This was a recreated fight scene from when Johnny killed Bob the soc. I added more action and suspense.

3 comments:

  1. You had good details
    Put the authors note on the top of your peace

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  2. You need to put an authors note just to make sure people know what you are writing about. otherwise everything else is well written.

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  3. you need an authors note and good details.

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